February 17, 2011 4:24 PM PST
Wow, never cease to amaze! :)Thank you both for taking the time not only to critique, but draw notes, and even do a fantastic re-timing! The first part of this scene, (b) as Mark had stated, was very difficult to portray believably. I wanted to really convey that the father is almost petrified at the destruction of his work, and is in a state of disbelief. You're right that I should tighten up the time I spend in each pose, timing has never been a strong suit of mine and one I plan to keep working on.Staging the brush is another great point, and one I obviously overlooked as I focused on other parts of the scene. This shows why it is always good to have a fresh pair of eyes look at your work.Due to the fathers complex design it has been difficult for me to convey a clear line of action, and your thumbnails will help me greatly. :) Making sincere animation can be difficult when dealing with a heavily emotional scene, and as Jen pointed out, overacting or giving too much motion can run the risk of making the shot unintentionally comical. Thank you again for the re-timing, I am really beginning to get a more solid feel for the shot now!I will take these notes and begin reworking my shot the next time I have access to a light table. Thank you both for taking the time to do this and I hope this demonstrates why the Mentoring program is a worth while endeavor for any animator hoping to improve their craft. The critiques were very clear and well written. I was excited to see how you discovered certain areas of my shot that needed improvement and how each of you think about improving the same animation. This is a great program and one I plan on revisiting once I have progressed my shot. -Patrick Stannard-